You shouldn't need to prove that you're worth something to your friends with victories. :c
But it was really cool. I liked how the sounds sounded hand-made. Some of the melodies felt too internal. Like.. It's hard to explain. There's no science or study-able method to it, just try to imagine the melody in your head before you make it. Or humm a melody while listening to what you already have.
Anyways, decent song. Needs mastering. And by that I mean a really thick compressor over the Master Channel. Preferably a multi-band one. Raise the highs and lows a bit and push the threshold way down. I think you'll notice significant improvement, and also it adds a powerful, professionalish sheen that will quickly uhm.. impress your friends.
Anyways, Thanks for uploading. I'd appreciate if you'd listen/comment on my music as well. :3